2007年10月2日 星期二
Car Accidents
I go to work four days a week. And I have to ride on Chonghua road to go there. Chonghua road is convenient for me but also dangerous. Actually, it’s been late when I am on my way back to the dormitory. So almost every time, I see car accidents. Just tonight, I was riding my scooter and when I reached the crossroad near the Chimei hospital, there was an accident. I think it was the scooter bumped into the car. And the motorcyclist was taken to the hospital immediately. I was scared in fact. But I know accident happens all the time. So I learn how careful I should be when I’m riding.
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"Actually, it’s been late when I am on my way back to the dormitory. So almost every time, I see car accidents." There's no reason to use "actually" here. You'd use that to correct a previous statement. Here you'd want to say only "It’s always late when I return to the dormitory, I see car accidents almost every time".
"I think it was the scooter bumped into the car." ==> "I think a scooter ran into a car."
"I was scared in fact." This is a strange sentence because of the "in fact". You need to tell the reader what you were scared of. You should not say "in fact": there's no reason to say that. You'd have to have said something like this: "I drove by as if nothing had happened, but I was scared, in fact, that one of these nights I, too, might end up colliding with a car."
"accident happens" ==> "accidents happen". Inexcusable.
Clearly expressed. Good.
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