2007年9月28日 星期五
9.28
Today’s weather is really good. Actually, I should say it’s really hot! Almost everyone is screaming for the heat. It is absolutely right if people standing under the sun, they’ll get burned in just a few minutes. What’s worse, the air conditioner in the classroom I stayed this afternoon was broken. It drove me crazy. At this moment, I just hope winter can come faster. After all, I don’t mind to be frozen.
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"screaming for the heat." ==> "screaming because of the heat." What you wrote means that almost everyone is cold and wants the heat turned on.
"It is absolutely right if people standing under the sun, they’ll get burned in just a few minutes." This is a strange sentence. It really doesn't belong here. Your topic is the heat, not sunburn. Delete this sentence.
"the classroom I stayed this afternoon" ==> "the I had history [or whatever class you had] class in this afternoon".
"winter can come faster." ==> "winter will come soon".
"After all, I don't mind to be frozen." ==> "I'd rather be too cold than too hot". The "after all" is incorrect here. It doesn't mean "finally", and even if it did, it would still be wrong in this sentence. It would be correct only if we already knew that you preferred cold weather to hot weather.
"I don't mind to be frozen" is not what you mean. To be grammatically correct, it would have to be "I don't mind being frozen", but when you think about what that really means, you know that it's not what you want to say.
Still, the point of your paragraph is clear, except for that. Fair -- only because of the irrelevant material about sunburn.
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